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Old 09-04-2003, 05:20 AM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]I'm not much one for song lyrics. I keep seeing all these really long entries, that seem much too much for such a minor scene. If PHJ's isn't dependant on the song lyrics, I think it could be shortened to the last three lines:

[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] Were you paying attention, Neo, or were you watching that Agent walk past? Look again.
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] AHHHHHHH!
[bost_uid0]Cher:[/bost_uid0] Gets them every time.

I would consider going with this.[/colorost_uid0]
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