[Standback]

[color=#000000:post_uid0]I agree with Sa'ar - Derek's robot scene is much better. May be improved with a couple of tiny changes of phrase:

[b:post_uid0]Robot:[/b:post_uid0] Hey! I can see his head! It's a boy!
[b:post_uid0]Neo:[/b:post_uid0] Gee, thanks. As if the birth symbolism wasn't obvious enough.
[b:post_uid0]Robot:[/b:post_uid0] I think you mean rebirth.
[b:post_uid0]Neo:[/b:post_uid0] No, rebirth is when you're dunked in water.
[b:post_uid0]Robot:[/b:post_uid0] That can be arranged.
(WHOOSH!)
[b:post_uid0]Morpheus:[/b:post_uid0] Hey look, everyone! It's a boy!
[b:post_uid0]Neo:[/b:post_uid0] Sigh.

I don't like the following as much, but I like it better than some of the other suggestions so far:

[b:post_uid0]Neo:[/b:post_uid0] Hey! You promised M&Ms and rabbit holes, not goo and Borg implants! Get these tubes out of my body!
[b:post_uid0]Robot:[/b:post_uid0] Sure thing, Neo!
[b:post_uid0]Neo:[/b:post_uid0] Good! Now get me something to wash this pink gunk off!
[i:post_uid0](FLUSH)[/i:post_uid0]

Also, the two threads on Morpheus and the Question might be possible to combine into one:

[b:post_uid0]Trinity:[/b:post_uid0] We're here. Now, be honest -- he knows more than you can possibly imagine.
[b:post_uid0]Neo:[/b:post_uid0] Huh. I seem to get that a lot.
[b:post_uid0]Morpheus:[/b:post_uid0] Hello, Neo. I know you have a question, a question that is eating away at you, and here... here, you can find the answer to that question.
[b:post_uid0]Neo:[/b:post_uid0] Sweet! Then you can tell me where I can get shades like that?
[b:post_uid0]Morpheus:[/b:post_uid0] I'm going to pretend I heard, "What is the Matrix?"
[b:post_uid0]Neo:[/b:post_uid0] Oh. Is it a giant virtual construct that only exists in the minds of the people hooked up to it?
[b:post_uid0]Morpheus:[/b:post_uid0] Take all the fun out of it, why don't you.

As for the DayQuil, I must confess - as part of aforementioned "international audience," I ain't got a clue what it is. I can get the joke from the context, but I say drop the Quils. The M&M joke is great.

Am looking forward to a block where I get in before the whole scene is written. :)[/color:post_uid0]