Well, I threw in my vote for the first one listed because nothing really jumped out at me either. And the first one looks short and snappy and it's silly in a nice where-did-THAT-come-from way.
The second one just doesn't thrill me. It's missing something, possibly.
I like the concept behind the third one (but then I was involved in it
). Brown's line could probably be changed and improved.
I wrote the fourth one listed, and I still feel the need to change things a bit (see the post where I suggested it for why). Maybe we could make it work by changing Smith's first line to
Quote:
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Agent Smith: Setting free, setting f--waaait a moment. Ha, nice try. Your follow-the-leader mind tricks won't work on *me*.
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or something to show he
does want to "win" but isn't willing to be tricked into doing something he doesn't want to do.
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