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Old 10-01-2003, 06:41 PM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0][quoteost_uid0]It's a wee bit clumsy on the joke-melding... but still...[/quoteost_uid0]

One of the things I've learned from Kira (and it's taken a while to get it through my thick head) is that anything after the punchline is counterproductive. I've also discovered that you can have funny, or you can have plotpoint, but you can seldom have both. I say leave it at "Tofu" and assume the audience is familiar enough with the story that they know he's going to betray them.

I'm surprised nobody's picked up on "That's our screensaver." I've been waiting *months* to use that.[/colorost_uid0]
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