Pie? You'll have to do much better to grab the reward of my precious pie!
(Not very much, but still...)
If I may offer some criticism: The whole "fight scene" thing really had me groaning, and is IMHO one of the biggest weak points in it. I think you should just replace it with a cardboard sheet reading "Extravagant Fight Scene" or such, and act like there's nothing unusual about it. Breaking the fourth wall only works in moderation.
Gatac
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Katy: Can I have the skill 'drive car off bridge and have parachute handy'?
Justin: It's kind of a limited skill.
Greg: Depends on how often you drive off bridges.
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