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03-23-2004, 07:10 AM
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 ost_uid0]Cypher: Great job pulling me back, Tank. Allow me to say "thank you."Tank: Can you say it without the gun? GA!K! Cypher: Hey Trinity, are you really -- YANK! (kills Apoc) -- better off with this airhead, saving our -- YANK! (kills Switch) -- crappy real lives, than living with me in fantasyland? Trinity: *over the phone* Sorry, couldn't hear you from all the interuptions. Tank: Hey, Cypher! Allow me to say--"you're welcome!" Cypher: Lethal irony sucks. GAK! Tank: Heh. The fake GAK gets them every time. Neo: *over the phone*Maybe I should try that sometime. Trinity: Hello? Anyone there? Operator: The person who were trying to call has been disconected. Please deposit 25 cents and try again. Trinity: Crap, no pockets. *Phone Rings* Neo: Saved by the bell[/color ost_uid0]
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03-23-2004, 09:06 AM
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ost_uid0]I like it, but these lines should stay:[quote ost_uid0]Tank: Heh. The fake GAK gets them every time.Neo: Maybe I should try that sometime.[/quote ost_uid0][/colorost_uid0]
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03-23-2004, 10:58 PM
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ost_uid0]I like Zeke's suggestion, but maybe we could break it up into seperate lines.[b ost_uid0]Cypher[/bost_uid0]: Hey Trinity, are you really -- *[iost_uid0]YANK![/iost_uid0]*[b ost_uid0]Apoc[/bost_uid0]: GAK![b ost_uid0]Cypher[/bost_uid0]: -- better off with this airhead, saving our -- *[iost_uid0]YANK![/iost_uid0]*[b ost_uid0]Switch[/bost_uid0]: GAK![b ost_uid0]Cypher[/bost_uid0]: -- crappy real lives, than living with me in fantasyland?Hmm... a bit too long maybe.[/color ost_uid0]
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03-23-2004, 11:11 PM
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ost_uid0]Probably why it wasn't broken up.  If you want to get them in, you could try something like Cypher: *ZAP!*--Hey Trinity, are you really --*YANK!*--better off with this airhead (etc) Dozer, Apoc, and Switch: GAK![/color ost_uid0]
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03-24-2004, 02:02 AM
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ost_uid0]Honestly, I like Gatac's GAK, Psuedo-GAK, GAK, GAK scene. I think it would be slightly better to have my version with Cypher saying "Something isn't right here" rather than Neo, but either way it's a good joke.[/colorost_uid0]
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03-24-2004, 02:38 AM
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ost_uid0]First off, I love [quote ost_uid0]Tank: The fake GAK gets them every time.Neo: Perhaps I should try that sometime.[/quote ost_uid0]but I think it would read better if the second line were: [quote ost_uid0]Neo: Perhaps I should try that.[/quoteost_uid0]only because time used so many times sounds a bit off. I'm being incredibly stupidly picky, I'm sure, but I just think it would make it perfect (I REALLY love that line) Also [quote ost_uid0]Cypher: It's gonna take a miracle to save you now, Neo!Neo: I have just four words for you, Cypher: "I'm in the sequels". Tank: And I've got two words for you--Die, sucka! Cypher: One word: GAK! [/quote ost_uid0]is good so I guess without adding/subtracting anything else, I would suggest: [quote ost_uid0]Cypher: Great job pulling me back, Tank. Allow me to say "thank you." Tank: Can you say it without the gun? Cypher: Hey Trinity, are you really better off with this airhead, saving our crappy real lives, than living with me in fantasyland? Trinity: Compared to you, I'd be better off with a famished cannibal. Tank: Hey, Cypher! Â Allow me to say--"you're welcome!" Cypher: Lethal irony sucks. Â GAK! Tank: Heh. Â The fake GAK gets them every time. Neo: Maybe I should try that. [/quote ost_uid0][/colorost_uid0] |
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03-24-2004, 10:39 AM
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ost_uid0]I second that, Derek - Gatac's multi-GAK one was really great, and by far my favorite of the proferred suggestions. IMHO, the Cypher-spooking-out should be centered in the third block, with him talking to Trinity. [b ost_uid0]Cypher (over the phone):[/bost_uid0] Trin, how can you prefer that airhead over a hot backstabbing serial killer like me?[b ost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] [iost_uid0](sigh)[/iost_uid0] I get that one a lot, too.[b ost_uid0]Cypher (over the phone):[/bost_uid0] Y'see, Neo obviously isn't the One, unless I'm about to be killed by a convenient plot contri-GAK![b ost_uid0]Tank (over the gun):[/bost_uid0] Fake GAK. Gets 'em every time.[b ost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Maybe I should try that sometime.[/colorost_uid0]
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03-24-2004, 01:02 PM
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ost_uid0]I like that block, Standback. Especially Tank's (over the gun) direction.Just to clarify stage direction though. It goes outside the colon and its only used once per person per scene, so it would be: [b ost_uid0]Cypher:[/bost_uid0] (over the phone) Trin, how can you prefer that airhead over a hot backstabbing serial killer like me?[b ost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] (sigh) I get that one a lot, too.[b ost_uid0]Cypher:[/bost_uid0] Y'see, Neo obviously isn't the One, unless I'm about to be killed by a convenient plot contri-GAK![b ost_uid0]Tank:[/bost_uid0] (over the gun) Fake GAK. Gets 'em every time.[b ost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Maybe I should try that sometime.[/colorost_uid0]
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03-24-2004, 01:35 PM
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ost_uid0]::airily:: Mere technicalities, my dear friend.Ahem. In this particular case, I'd fudge and keep the "(over the phone) twice, because otherwise the "(over the gun)" direction doesn't work as well. Rule of three - to know it is to love it.[/color ost_uid0]
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03-24-2004, 01:47 PM
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ost_uid0]Ooo, I really like this one.  And yes, keep both cases of "(over the phone)".[/colorost_uid0]
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ost_uid0]There's also a shorter, cleaner, subtler way to refer to all those murders -- change Trinity's comeback. Â Thus:[quote ost_uid0][bost_uid0]Cypher[/bost_uid0]: Hey Trinity, are you really better off with this airhead, saving our crappy real lives, than living with me in fantasyland?[b ost_uid0]Trinity[/bost_uid0]: (over the phone) Sorry, but traitorous serial murderers turn me off.[b ost_uid0]Tank[/bost_uid0]: Hey, Cypher! Â Allow me to say--"you're welcome!"[b ost_uid0]Cypher[/bost_uid0]: Lethal irony sucks. Â GAK![b ost_uid0]Tank[/bost_uid0]: Heh. Â The fake GAK gets them every time.[b ost_uid0]Neo[/bost_uid0]: (over the phone) Maybe I should try that sometime.[/quoteost_uid0]Note also that the fake GAK joke doesn't work if the previous block lacks a fake GAK, as some of the more recently suggested ones do. Â -- Pteryx[/color ost_uid0] |
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03-24-2004, 05:20 PM
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ost_uid0]Hrm... come to think of it, if the previous isn't enough, there's also the option of doing this to the first block:[quote ost_uid0][bost_uid0]Cypher[/bost_uid0]: Great job pulling me back, Tank. Allow me to say "thank you."[b ost_uid0]Dozer, Apoc, and Switch[/bost_uid0]: GAK![b ost_uid0]Tank[/bost_uid0]: Can you say it without the gun? Â "GAK!"[b ost_uid0]Cypher[/bost_uid0]: Hm, something's wrong here, but I can't quite put my finger on it.[/quoteost_uid0][/colorost_uid0] |
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03-25-2004, 10:24 PM
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ost_uid0]This just occurred to me... I don't like it as much as the other suggestions, but it's funny enough to share:[b ost_uid0]Tank:[/bost_uid0] Take THAT, you murdering bastard![b ost_uid0]Cypher:[/bost_uid0] Wha-- Not dead? But you're not in the seque-GAK![/colorost_uid0]
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03-26-2004, 02:46 PM
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ost_uid0]I'm also with Derek, and not just because it happens to have one of my blocks Gatac[/color ost_uid0]
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ost_uid0]I think we can start consolidating votes here. I vote in favor of Gatac's:[quote ost_uid0]Dozer: GAK!Tank: Pseudo-GAK! Switch: GAK! Apoc: GAK! Cypher: Hm, something's wrong here, but I can't quite put my finger on it.[/quote ost_uid0]No vote from me yet for either the preceding block (Cypher getting aboard - they were all pretty good) or Cypher's death (because I like my own).[/color ost_uid0]
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03-28-2004, 04:02 AM
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ost_uid0]While I do find Gatac's block amusing, let's not forget the shortness criterion. (...says Pteryx, as she starts fiving something so long that it'll inevitibly be more of a "fifteener".) -- Pteryx[/colorost_uid0]
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ost_uid0]My vote goes to...Cypher: Great job pulling me back, Tank. Allow me to say "thank you." Tank: Can you say it without the gun? "GAK!" Cypher: Hey Trinity, are you really better off with this airhead, saving our crappy real lives, than living with me in fantasyland? Trinity: Compared to you, I'd be better off with a famished cannibal. Tank: Hey, Cypher! Allow me to say--"you're welcome!" Cypher: Lethal irony sucks. GAK! Tank: Heh. The fake GAK gets them every time. Neo: Maybe I should try that. The Cypher line would be good with or without the GAK!s[/color ost_uid0]
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