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ost_uid0]First off, I love [quote ost_uid0]Tank: The fake GAK gets them every time.Neo: Perhaps I should try that sometime.[/quote ost_uid0]but I think it would read better if the second line were: [quote ost_uid0]Neo: Perhaps I should try that.[/quote ost_uid0]only because time used so many times sounds a bit off. I'm being incredibly stupidly picky, I'm sure, but I just think it would make it perfect (I REALLY love that line) Also [quote ost_uid0]Cypher: It's gonna take a miracle to save you now, Neo!Neo: I have just four words for you, Cypher: "I'm in the sequels". Tank: And I've got two words for you--Die, sucka! Cypher: One word: GAK! [/quote ost_uid0]is good so I guess without adding/subtracting anything else, I would suggest: [quote ost_uid0]Cypher: Great job pulling me back, Tank. Allow me to say "thank you." Tank: Can you say it without the gun? Cypher: Hey Trinity, are you really better off with this airhead, saving our crappy real lives, than living with me in fantasyland? Trinity: Compared to you, I'd be better off with a famished cannibal. Tank: Hey, Cypher! Â Allow me to say--"you're welcome!" Cypher: Lethal irony sucks. Â GAK! Tank: Heh. Â The fake GAK gets them every time. Neo: Maybe I should try that. [/quote ost_uid0][/color ost_uid0] |
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