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05-23-2003, 01:48 PM
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 ost_uid0][quoteost_uid0="Derek"]Is this scene really necessary? Seriously, it's short, it's backstory, it's not entirely relevant. I would think this scene could be omitted from the fiver.[/quoteost_uid0]Whether or not this scene was necessary before, we've gotten enough funny suggestions that I think it'd be a shame to leave all of them out. We should be able to keep it short, though. I like Kira's alteration, but Morpheus's first sentence in his second line could use a bit of work, I think. A little [i ost_uid0]too[/iost_uid0] subtle, you might say.  Maybe something like [quote ost_uid0]Morpheus: ... and then the Oracle predicted the return of the One. That's you, Neo.Neo: Why are you so sure I'm the One? Morpheus: No significant reason, I just happen to like anagrams. I hope I didn't overload your brain with all this. Neo: Don't worry, it happens all the time.[/quote ost_uid0][/colorost_uid0]
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