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Old 06-10-2003, 06:48 AM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]That could be shortened to:

[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] Neo, since I like anagrams, I've decided that you are the One --
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Sweet!
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] -- who will bring balance to the Force.
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] I have a bad feeling about this....

This one I like... It works well. I still like the "With the O at the end" and the screenname joke, but those seem to be dead and buried by general consensus.[/colorost_uid0]
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Old 06-10-2003, 07:32 AM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]I like it NAH - it makes the scene flow better. Â Plus I'm always a fan of combining and recombobulating.

I'd go with yours Standback for it's shortness, but the why you do it - the anagrams joke loses it's effectiveness.

So, as it stands:

[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] ...and after the first One left, the Oracle predicted there'd be another One.
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] What makes you think I'm the One?
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] I like anagrams. Â Neo, I am certain that you are the One --
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Sweet!
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] -- who will bring balance to the Force.
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] I have a bad feeling about this....[/colorost_uid0]

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Old 06-11-2003, 06:02 PM
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Well, the reason I wanted it shortened is because I think it's kinda awkward as it is:

[quoteost_uid0]the Oracle predicted there'd be another One. What makes you think I'm the One? Neo, I am certain that you are the One --[/quoteost_uid0]

At the very least, the first line can be cut, since we're not using the Two joke.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Point taken Standback. How about something like this:

[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] ...and after the first One left, the Oracle predicted there'd be another One. I believe that is you Neo.
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] What makes you think I'm the One?
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] I like anagrams. As I was saying, Neo, I am certain that you are the One --
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] Sweet!
[bost_uid0]Morpheus:[/bost_uid0] -- who will bring balance to the Force.
[bost_uid0]Neo:[/bost_uid0] I have a bad feeling about this....

Or, we can just go with what you suggested [/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Im going with Sax's version. The bring balance to the force line is a good one.

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[color=#000000ost_uid0]I like it too.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Sax's version is fine by me.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]uts hand up to vote for sax:[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]It's good, but the capitalized F in "force" has to go [/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]I think this is my third vote in this thread, but sure, it works for me.[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]Hear, hear.

I still kind of miss that "Two" joke, but it can either be worked in later, or maybe in some distant fiver for [iost_uid0]The Matrix Reloaded[/iost_uid0] it could make a revamped appearance. (Anyone who's seen the movie will probably know where I'm thinking of.)[/colorost_uid0]
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[color=#000000ost_uid0]It's good. But next time, :suspicious: I'm gonna remember to save my good suggestions for the end, when everybody's tired of debating the first ones. Â [/colorost_uid0]

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Okay, that's what we'll go with. Block 12 will be up by tomorrow.
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