Sci-fi story help - need a little insight on a story i wrote

[Celeste]

[color=#000000ost_uid0]This scene is a part of a much larger picture, you must remember that. She says the love you part because so far.. they haven't expressed that they love each other yet. She's afraid to say it to him for fear he'll hurt her. He just can't muster up the courage. And besides, she's emensly distressed in that scene. She's on the floor, crying her eyes out, curled up in the fetal position. -_- (I love torturing my characters) I didn't want to use subtlty in this in order to show the power of her emotions.[/colorost_uid0]