Lord of the Hoops

[Gatac]

Pie? You'll have to do much better to grab the reward of my precious pie!

(Not very much, but still...)

If I may offer some criticism: The whole "fight scene" thing really had me groaning, and is IMHO one of the biggest weak points in it. I think you should just replace it with a cardboard sheet reading "Extravagant Fight Scene" or such, and act like there's nothing unusual about it. Breaking the fourth wall only works in moderation.

Gatac